Revision

     For my revision, I choose to revise my first english paper, personal narrative. I choose this piece because I felt like I could have added more detail to portray the image I wanted. I think with the experience I have now, the paper could be much better. The two main aspects i wanted to focus on were imagery and sentence fluency.
     Imagery in a personal narrative is crucial. One of the main points of a person narrative is to make the reader feel like they are there. By adding details and words appealing to the senses you can achieve this goal. I went back and tried to add words that appeal to touch and sight. I think it is most important to start off with strong details to create a strong starting place. Along with imagery the flow of a personal narrative is important. Before the revisions, most sentences were choppy so I tried to add longer sentences and create a flow. My personal narrative is better now that it includes specific details and a better flow. If I could completely rewrite the paper, I would depict a different part with more vivid scenes.

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